It is a little out of touch to presume that someone wants to follow your every observation and insight over the course of hundreds of pages without any sort of payoff. That's why writing isn't a one-way street. You have to give something back: an interesting plot, a surprise, a laugh, a moment of tenderness, a mystery for the reader to piece together.
Christopher BollenThere's also something sexual about watching the nubile girl in terror. But you do take on her fear as your own.
Christopher Bollen