Writing isn't just on the page; it's voices in the reader's head. Read what you write out loud to someone-anyone-and you will catch all kinds of things.

Or, in truth, eventually, though I still noticed, the callouses on my spirit prevented wounds (p.75).

I feel the stars. Each sparkle sets aflame the pain in my heart.

I believe we have breaks because we need them. So my suggestion is that you take the break. Eat chocolate.

Some affixes are wildly promiscuous.

And oh I want so much to sing, I tell myself no. But it is so hard to keep from singing.

Learning is not the accumulation of knowledge, but rather, one thing only: understanding