There's something about a parenthesis in fiction that puts one off, saying, "It's me, moi, jumping in now."
Our salvation never comes in the form we would have chosen.
You must get beyond divertissement, sketch, anecdote, the interesting moment. You must get to the mystery of human personality. What is the line of the story that leads us to a point where we see or intuit something we haven't before?
Uninvited criticism is insult.
Using language like jungle growth isn't the solution to telling a story.
Sometimes, in that darkness, there is a single act of love, some selfless gesture, an aspiration, and we see that it's not been all waste, all hopeless, and we can ... well ... go on.