Don't worry about how pretty (the story) sounds, how lilting it is, and the imagery, and the metaphor, all that. Most readers don't care. It's the people in your book that matter.
Terry McMillanI'm the only one who can stop me.. I'm the one who's been sitting at the stoplight all these years, waiting for the light to turn green.
Terry McMillanIt goes without saying that your friends are usually the first to discuss your personal business behind your back.
Terry McMillanI remember the day I turned thirty. I was getting out of the shower and I stood in front of the mirror and stared at myself for a long time. I examined every inch of my body and appreciated the fact that I finally looked like a grown woman. I also assumed that this was how I was going to look for the rest of my life. The way I saw it, I was never going to age; I'd just look up one day and be old.
Terry McMillan